Ok, moving away from plot. Nice job. Now you have to move into analysis. You mention the three settings. Do any of them create a specific mood? Represent or mean anything larger than themselves? Think on that a bit more. For the second last response, instead of talking about character actions, try to go into the realm of character traits. What is Jennifer like? How do her actions reflect these traits?
Gloria - 3/5 Responses
Good effort to try to get caught up. In the future, when you respond, try to stick to one topic. The response about Keir kind of jumps around. Try talking only about Keir's characteristics. I like the last response alot, but it tends to ramble from topic to topic. But it provides good insight into character.
Stephanie - 3/5 Responses
I really like that last response. It's got good voice. When you say "call me cheesy" it shows that you are aware of your audience and anticipating it's reaction. I like how you play that. Let's make sure to get all of our work done, eh?
Jessica - 4/5 Responses
Jessica, I'm digging the voice in your responses but you have to develop them further. When you say that a book is teaching you new things and you don't elaborate, it comes off kind of fake.
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